Originally posted by TSANG_HO_FISH at 2004-8-8 05:43 PM:
非常期待下一章
加油
"這一章好像很小,很吊人胃口"
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-8-14 09:12:
多謝支持,
現在我可正傷腦筋如何寫= =...
Originally posted by 秒殺手 at 2004-8-20 03:09 PM:
虧威君每一次都想出這般刺激的情節出來..
每天吸引著小劍來等待威君的新一章...
努力 ~ 威兄
Originally posted by ~殘劍~ at 2004-9-6 02:08 PM:
小劍認為略有不足可改善之處, 希望威兄可以再創佳績吧.
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-9-6 02:13 PM:
其實呢一章係故事背後既真相,同結局的伏線
留意一下最後"帝國第五聯合艦隊司令":O.o
Originally posted by ~殘劍~ at 2004-9-6 02:58 PM:
小劍明白這一章是故事的背影介紹, 其實小劍剛才所說的不足之處就是在「帝國第五聯合艦隊司令」這句裡..
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-9-6 03:40 PM:
這個麻..........
日後會作詳細交代,到時就會明晒
Originally posted by ~殘劍~ at 2004-9-6 04:32 PM:
小劍所言之不足, 非因小劍不明白威君的意思, 而是之前既無交代人類當時乃實行帝制, 文中亦沒有交代「帝國第五聯合艦隊司令」是誰, 在正常的情況下, 若希望令行文更通暢, 應該加上「帝國第五聯合艦隊 ...
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-9-6 04:57 PM:
nonono.............
講野果個唔係人類
Originally posted by ~殘劍~ at 2004-9-6 05:27 PM:
不是嘛..既然來了一個反撒旦的外星地球大聯盟?
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-9-6 06:22 PM:
亦都唔係咁簡單.........
唔到最後係唔知真相既......................
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-9-16 04:43 PM:
小弟開學了
恐怕較少時間寫作
所以以後每一章要較長時間
請各位原諒
Originally posted by ~殘劍~ at 2004-9-17 03:48 PM:
不打緊, 小劍也是隔段時間才上來一次, 重質不重量, 無論在學業、愛情、寫作上, 小劍希望威君繼續努力吧..
Originally posted by 靚仔千千 at 2004-9-21 09:06 PM:
唔打緊la
學業為重
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-10-1 21:04:
下一回就有得打......
之後差唔多每一回都有片開,海陸空都有8)
第九回手槁已完成,只差打入電腦
Originally posted by 秒殺手 at 2004-10-3 12:48 PM:
小劍對魔鬼可沒有一點研究,所以十分抱歉,未能給予一點意見予威君..這一章總算豐富了小劍的眼界,感謝威君的賜教..
Originally posted by 靚仔千千 at 2004-10-3 08:59 PM:
GD R
幾時下一集r???
猶大係未大佬黎架
Originally posted by 靚仔千千 at 2004-10-17 10:22 PM:
2個出晒la
好果2個出晒既話我諗我都大概知道果2個結局會係點
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-11-4 17:52:
最遲下星期三,因為星期一有test
Originally posted by 秒殺手 at 2004-11-5 09:05 AM:
好的 ~小劍再等多幾天吧..
一星期也可以等..為什麼等不到那幾天..
小劍支持威君繼續寫下去..
同時祝願威君在TEST中可大獲全勝
Originally posted by 秒殺手 at 2004-11-6 08:30 AM:
小劍想..喬治.布殊想不到自己成為了人類心中的戰爭罪犯呢-.-
還得給人把他與阿道夫.希特拉平起平坐..真是不知說什麼好了-.-
原來先前的陰謀竟是美國圖謀復興其霸權..
可是現實真的發生這些事 ...
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-11-6 20:07:
我好比面布殊
可以同希特拉平起平坐~係佢既榮幸
致於美國既陰謀.....可是早就有了....過多兩三章就知
Originally posted by 白劍雲 at 2004-11-8 05:08 PM:
問題應該是對話方面
而故事上我也有一個疑問
若其他以火藥為主流的兵器也有制敵之效
那為什麼「核」會沒作用
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-11-8 07:20 PM:
對話方面有何問題?不妨提出來:)3
而核武之所以無效,往後會有所解釋:)2
Originally posted by xmans00331 at 2004-11-8 07:34 PM:
唔係搭載中子消除器下化=.=""
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-11-8 08:31 PM:
無咁誇
大致係因為炸左又黎過,炸左又黎過
遲兩,三章會有詳細解釋
Originally posted by 劍魂獨孤 at 2004-11-10 09:23 PM:
你咁問我都唔知點答你= ="
算~遲d睇埋就知咩事
Originally posted by xmans00331 at 2004-11-11 11:04 PM:
咁就快D post上黎啦=.=
Originally posted by 0o呂布o0 at 2004-11-15 11:19 AM:
我覺得你呢篇文章應該要精下....
比起水版果d既所謂既原創小說
同你呢篇比就好似老師同學生既比較
都係果句:支持你
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